What do we do with questions like this?
Magisch already suggested an improvement in the comments.
I'm personally thinking that for this paragraph:
It's not that she's at all rude about it; she isn't. However, her pronunciation is just plain wrong to me, and I can't be untrue to myself by pronouncing it her way. Besides, I never even remember. You can't memorize every little detail about everybody you work with. People pronounce my last name wrong all the time (it's not really Plunkett).
Both 'I can't be untrue to myself by pronouncing it her way' and 'You can't memorize every little detail about everybody you work with' are what's leading to the downvotes and comment discussion underneath the question?
I was thinking of just stepping in and editing them out, but I'm not sure whether I would be overstepping a boundary? So, what do we do here, just suggest them in a comment like Magisch did or step in and edit?